The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
population
size and the
rate
of
birth
and
death
in England and Wales between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
, the
population
tended to rise dramatically and the
death
rate
and the
birth
rate
declined gradually, the former of which started to increase and the latter remained constant. Starting with the graph for the
population
, followed a quite different pattern from the
birth
and
death
rate
.
First,
there were only about 2
million
people in 1700, which increased to reach just above 5
million
in 1750.
Although
it soon started to drop to below 4
million
in 1800, there was a sharp increase until 1950 when the number of people reached approximately 45
million
.
Then
, the
population
kept rising less drastically until it reached the top at over 50
million
in 2000. Turning to the chart for the
birth
and
death
rate
, they were more likely to follow a similar pattern as they both showed a rising trend from 1700 to 1750 with 30 to 40 and about 26 to just below 38 respectively. After they remained unchanged for 50 years, they experienced significant drops to hit the bottom at about 22 and 20 respectively in 1950, from which the former started to show
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upward trend to reach 34 in 2000
whereas
the latter remained constant throughout the rest of the periods.
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