The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the average weekly spending by families based on their earnings in the span of five decades (1968 and 2018).
Overall
, the amount of spending in the recent year
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been more equally distributed between the categories. In the year 1968, the money spent on food took up the highest portion of 35%,
while
the other classifications were drastically far from that percentage.
Secondly
, housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
took 10% of the family's income. Next in place were the output on leisure at 9% and household
goods
, personal
goods
, and transport sitting at 8% of the weekly earnings.
Lastly
, fuel and power held the lowest average of 6% compared to the other
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. Recently in 2018, the need for leisure grew drastically and it became the largest percentage of spending at 22%.
Similarly
, housing was at 19%, which multiplied twice the portion from the previous period given.
While
the output on food was cut back twice the amount to 17%, clothing and
footware
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footwear
to 5%, personal
goods
to 4% and transport to 8%.
Lastly
, the percentage of earnings spent on household
goods
remained the same.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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