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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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After the pandemic, the revolution
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 the working system enabled the choice
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 working remotely.
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 many employees
considers
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this
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 an efficient choice, some others think differently.
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 essay will support the idea that the advantages of
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 method
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
Initially
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, the pandemic forced companies to stop working from the office and opted for remote working using online conferences
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 as Zoom and Google Meets. In most recent years,
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 method
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 applied in most companies, visibly proven by job offers through Linked In that prefer remote working
staffs
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.
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 most employees consider online
meeting
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 as the most effective use of
time
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, the seniors who are less technology savvy
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 that
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 form of communication
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 of human touch, which
reduced
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 their working experience.
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, most workers who do not own a proper mic and camera
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 prone to inhibiting a
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 meeting session.
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of workers feel that by spending less
time
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 on traffic or commuters, they can allocate the
time
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 to do more useful things
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 as completing tasks to meet the deadline.
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, the average traffic
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 a capital city
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 as Jakarta
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 usually takes around two to three hours on a busy day, and about the same for those using public transport, causing road rage and negative energy at work.
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, employees
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 benefit from managing their own
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 and task handling by working remotely
,
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tends
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 to have a better energy for work in a more relaxed choice of workplace. Positively,
staffs
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staff
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that
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who
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 are given the freedom to choose their most effective
time
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 and place for completing assignments are proven to be more creative and productive. A possible solution for senior workers
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who
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 are not tech savvy
,
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apply
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 is that they choose to
be working
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work
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 from the office, and have
an
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assistance to communicate with
majority
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the majority
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 of the staff
that
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who
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 are working remotely. In conclusion, companies that
sets
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 up remote working will receive advantages
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 as a better use of
time
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 and
enhance
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employee's
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employee
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 productivity to meet
the
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apply
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deadlines.

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grammar
Ensure consistent verb agreement to avoid confusion. For example, 'While many employees considers' should be 'While many employees consider' and 'this method is applied' should be 'this method has been applied'.
style
Include more varied sentence structures to improve readability and flow. For example, instead of repeating 'while', try using other conjunctions like 'whereas' or 'although'.
evidence
Add more specific examples and data to support points made, especially when discussing the disadvantages and potential solutions. This strengthens arguments and adds credibility.
content
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages of working from home.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are clearly marked, setting a solid framework for the essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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