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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevante

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevante
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The diagram
show
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 us the transformation of geothermal
energy
 into electrical
energy
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, there are five phases and
this
 occurs in two different places: Under the ground and
plant
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 production.
Firstly
, water
in
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 low
temperature
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temperatures
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 is pumped into the ground to a thin and long way about 4.5 km. After that,
starts
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the stage 2,
and
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the cold water is injected
in
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 high pressure
to
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 a geothermal zone, where they has been your temperature
changed
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 in contact
of
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 the extremely hot rock and
it
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is pumped again to the surface. It is the final step for
process
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the process
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at
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the underground called
production
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the production
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 zone. The
last
 block combines two parts,
stage
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 4 and 5 when the hot water is condensed and
this
 hermetic system
created
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pression
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pressure
 and the turbine is moved with
this
 power.
This
 movement turns together the electric generator where the mechanical
energy
 is converted
in
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 electrical
energy
 and it is transported to the power lines.
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