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The diagram shows the main systems of writing used throughout the world

The diagram shows the main systems of writing used throughout the world
The flow chart illustrates that there are 5 writing
systems
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 that are used across the world.
Overall
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, there are 5 writing
systems
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consisting
Verb problem
apply
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of
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apply
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Logographic, Abjad, Abjuda, Alphabetic and syllabic. The different
type
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types
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 of writing
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system
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systems
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there is giving
Wrong verb form
give
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 examples and
notes
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. The
example
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examples
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 and
notes
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 are provided by writing
systems
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such
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 as Logographic, Abjad and Alphabetic. The first is Logographic, there is
one
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character
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 the same as 1 word.
For instance
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,
Chinese
Add an article
the Chinese
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 writing
system
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. The
notes
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 are the writing
systems
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 that have
same
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the same
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 type
could
Correct word choice
and could
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 be used
although
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 the spoken differ like Chinese and Japanese.
Secondly
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, Abjad is
one
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character
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 equal
with
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to
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one
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 consonant. The example is
arabic
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Arabic
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 and the
notes
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 are sound-based becoming the first type of writing
system
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. Third is Alphabetic,
it
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which
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 has 1
character
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 same
with
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as
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 1 sound that
consist
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consists
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 of
vowel
Correct article usage
a vowel
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 or consonant.
For example
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, English. The other types are Abjuda and Syllabic. The Abjuda writing
system
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 is
one
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character
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 same with
one
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 consonant plus
one
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 vowel.
For instance
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, Indian
devanagari
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Devanagari
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.
Secondly
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 is Syllabic with
one
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character
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 equal
with
Change preposition
to
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one
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 syllable like
Japanese
Correct article usage
the Japanese
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 Kana.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for instance, secondly".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words systems, system, notes, one, character with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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