Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thity years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?
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car
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cars
much
rapidly in three Correct quantifier usage
apply
recently
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recent
jam
in many cities in the world. So , Fix the agreement mistake
jams
government
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the government
this
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cars
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governments
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about
this
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transportation
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this
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create
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creates
cars
in the street and it causes traffic and pollution in the world. Use synonyms
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governments
should Use synonyms
rise
the price of petrol Correct your spelling
raise
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cars
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wealth
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that
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be effective
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use
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the use
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of their
cars
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use
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public
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of public
transportation
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transportation
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people
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transportation
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trains
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airplanes
according to
their needs with low prices.
Linking Words
To sum up
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decrease
traffic Change the verb form
decreasing
jam
in the cities that Fix the agreement mistake
jams
it
can be Correct pronoun usage
apply
solve
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solved
with
increasing Change preposition
by
tax
. Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
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, it is necessary that Linking Words
governments
make more Use synonyms
convenience
facilities for citizens.Replace the word
convenient
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic, but more specific examples would strengthen your arguments. For instance, you can mention specific cities that have implemented different measures to reduce traffic congestion.
coherence cohesion
There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that make some sentences hard to follow. Try to review your grammar and sentence structure to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to enhance clarity. Currently, some paragraphs have multiple ideas that may confuse the reader. Clear paragraphing will make your essay more cohesive.
coherence cohesion
You have clearly stated your viewpoint and provided a decent structure with introduction and conclusion paragraphs.
task achievement
Your essay covers some sensible measures that can be taken by the government to reduce car usage.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.