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The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.

The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.
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The pie chart illustrates the
proportion
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 of bottled
water
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 consumed in eight divergent areas and the diagram demonstrates the consumption of bottled
water
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 growing during 2001. In general, it can be observed that Western Europe used most of the
water
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 bottled supply and witnessed the least
growth
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 in
comsumption
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consumption
.
By contrast
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, the opposite trend was seen in Asia, accounting for the lowest ratio of global bottled
water
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 and had the fastest
growth
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rate
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. Looking at the first pie chart, in 2001, nearly
a
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half of
global
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the global
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water
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 bottled supply
used
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 by Western Europe, in comparison with only 15% of Australia.
This
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 was followed by the
proportion
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 of Latin
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America
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 and New Zealand, which
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 for 10% and 13%, respectively. In other regions, the
proportion
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 of
water
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 bottled usage was relatively low, just under 5%. Turning to the remaining statistics, in 2001, Asia experienced
a
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 highest
growth
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rate
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 in consumption of bottled
water
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in contrast
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of
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 Western Europe, at 14% and around 2%, respectively. Regarding
to
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New Zealand and Latin
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America
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, both regions saw a similar
growth
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rate
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 of bottled
water
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 usage, at 12%. A similar pattern was seen in
Middle
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 East and Africa,
just
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 under 11% related to the
proportion
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 of bottled
water
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growth
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. Meanwhile, over 7% of
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growth
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the growth
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rate
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 was attributed to Australia and
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, water, growth, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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