the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The chart clearly ranks ten distinct countries regarding their electricity production and consumption in the year 2014.
Overall
, it is evident that
while
China is the absolute leader in
this
figure, that of Korea is the lowest. As far as the top two countries are concerned ( China, and the United States), there is an imperceptible difference of nearly 1000 and 1400
billion
kWh
between their production and usage amount, respectively. In terms of the third-ranked country,
however
, the figure dwindles to approximately 1000
billion
kWh
for both captures.
Moreover
, Japan and India had quite comparable amounts of producing and consuming electrical energy with 936 and 856
billion
kWh
for the former and 871 and 698
billion
kWh
for the latter. In terms of Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany, they all showed roughly the same amount of figures with around 526-618
billion
kWh
of electricity manufacture and about 455-582 usage in 2014.
Lastly
, Korea having 485
billion
kWh
of electricity produced and 449.5
billion
kWh
of it consumed in the same year, takes the
last
place in
this
ranking.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • gigawatt hours (GWh)
  • renewable energy sources
  • non-renewable energy sources
  • industrialization
  • economic activities
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • energy efficiency
  • power generation
  • grid capacity
  • energy policies
  • consumption patterns
  • energy demand
  • production-consumption disparity
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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