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Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think re the causes of this? What effects will have on society?

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crimes
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immediately
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their
 freedom
this
 matter has some bad
effects
 on society that I will mention some of them in
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type
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 of
people
 are in prison the
people
who
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 they
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them
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are not really good persons with healthy
personality
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, they tell each other about their experiences that they had had so the thing that comes to their minds is that doing the
crimes
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 way without any mistake. Another cause is
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 they want to be in prison because
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the
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without
 any cost and
comfortable
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fore
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for
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 example, they do not need to work
for earning
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 money and they
do
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crimes
 to live in prison again. The
effects
crimes
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of crimes
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 on society and
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usually
people
 are
abbsoluyely
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obviously
 not good and have some
damages
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 to them and
government
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the government
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. Seeing
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and
 being in touch with
criminal
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criminals
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 by
people
 who are living
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 a good way and are trying for a good type of life can
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 them and it harms public opinion and the peace of ordinary
people
.
Govenment
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Government
have
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 to pay the cost of living prisoners and conquest lawyers that injure the economy. In conclusion, prisoners have some bad
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each other
eachother
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each other
 and society
also
 the deal of doing
crimes
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freedom
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freedom
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