The pie chart below shows the percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India from 2012 to 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India from 2012 to 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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the information about
gain
in different types of mass
media
in India between 2012 and 2017.
Overall
, it can be seen that
media
resources like TV and print
are have
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highest
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the highest
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percentage of
gain
in 2012 and 2017. First of all,
most
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the most
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popular mass
media
in 2012 and
also
in 2017 it television. Following that, in 2012 the figure
of
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TV was 43%
,
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after
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and after
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five years
number
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the number
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of
gain
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gains
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increased to just 45%.
In addition
, most of
growth
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impacted
to
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digital,
there
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which
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was 6% and raised to 15% from 2012 to 2017, separately.
Secondly
,
most
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the most
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popular
media
after television,
it
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apply
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is print. But
compare
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compared
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with TV,
gain
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a gain
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of print
was
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decreased significantly from 2012 to 2017, 38% and 30% respectively.
Further
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of radio
also
reduced from 7% to 4%.
Last
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one, which
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figure
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not
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has not
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changed
it
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is
outdoor
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,
stayed
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which stayed
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on
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at
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5% in both years .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words gain, media with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Ad spending
  • Percentage
  • Media channels
  • Trends
  • Comparison
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Digital media
  • Traditional media
  • Share
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Outstrip
  • Diversification
  • Advertising expenditure
  • Broadcast
  • Print
  • Online
  • Mobile
  • Projection
  • Year-on-year
  • Incremental change
  • Market dynamics
  • Advertising landscape
  • Revenue stream
  • Conventional outlets
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