The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the process of making carbonated drinks.
Overall
, it is clear from the pictures that the carbonated drinks produced consist of 5 steps, starting with the filtering of raw
water
then
the addition of carbon dioxide and mixing with additional ingredients in the middle,
finally
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and finally
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packaging it off to
sold
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sell
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.
Firstly
, the process begins by filtering raw
water
through the filter
then
adding
water
softener and chemicals before pumping the
water
into electric heaters to heat up the
water
,
then
after that the
water
passes a cooling pipe to stay in the tank which has carbon dioxide and the
water
will become carbonated
water
. In the third stage, the mixing tank will provide colouring, syrup and flavour and mix with the carbonated
water
in the tank, afterward, the readymade
water
will pass the filter again and
filling
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fill
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to the can and bottles.
Finally
, the finished drinks are packed and boxed up ready sent to supermarkets for retail.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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