The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the process of making carbonated drinks.
Overall
, it is clear from the pictures that the carbonated drinks produced consist of 5 steps, starting with the filtering of raw water
then
the addition of carbon dioxide and mixing with additional ingredients in the middle, finally
packaging it off toCorrect word choice
and finally
sold
.
Change the form of the verb
sell
Firstly
, the process begins by filtering raw water
through the filter then
adding water
softener and chemicals before pumping the water
into electric heaters to heat up the water
, then
after that the water
passes a cooling pipe to stay in the tank which has carbon dioxide and the water
will become carbonated water
.
In the third stage, the mixing tank will provide colouring, syrup and flavour and mix with the carbonated water
in the tank, afterward, the readymade water
will pass the filter again and filling
to the can and bottles. Wrong verb form
fill
Finally
, the finished drinks are packed and boxed up ready sent to supermarkets for retail.Submitted by thundernarnia on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼