The diagram below shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane.
This
diagram shows the process of making sugar from a sugar can.
There are seven steps in this
procedure. Farming carbohydrate
until dry Fix the agreement mistake
carbohydrates
carbohydrate
Fix the agreement mistake
carbohydrates
contains
Verb problem
are
shows
with seven steps of long-term methods.
To start with Wrong verb form
shown
growing
should continue Replace the word
growth
within
towel to eighteen months.The second step is to harvest after the mentioned months of times of planning.Harvesting either manually cutting down or with the use of heavy trucks Change preposition
for
such
as tractors or bring it down to the ground.
Furthermore
Add a comma
,
this
period manufacturers use an evaporator to heat the poured sugar to heat. Makeover when liquid becomes syrup by help from separate
the Wrong verb form
separating
carbohydrate
crystal from syrup then
gathered into a container for cooling and drying to take its order.In addition
, in conclusionAdd a comma
,
carbohydrate
are produced which is now ready to use.Submitted by agdanush on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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