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The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.

The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
The diagram illustrates the proportions of
students
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 in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages
in addition
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 to English from 2000 to 2010.
It is clear that
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 the
students
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 who do not speak other languages account for the highest
figure
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 and have increased
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% from 2000 to 2010 ( 30% compared to 35%). The second highest are
students
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 who have the capacity to speak Spanish and French
,
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 but have decreased half of the former
figure
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 from 20% to 10% of
students
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who
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apply
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can speak Spanish and 15% to 10% of the latter
figure
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 between 2000 and 2010.
However
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,
students
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 who have the ability to speak another language and two other languages increased slightly in the 10-year period, with the
figure
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 of the former increasing from 15% to 20% and the latter from 10% to 15%. The number of
students
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 who speak German stayed the same for the past
10-year time
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10 years
.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • students
  • speak
  • languages
  • ability
  • English
  • illustrates
  • increase
  • importance
  • multilingualism
  • global
  • reflecting
  • focus
  • historical
  • learning
  • indicating
  • shift
  • educational
  • priorities
  • diversity
  • access
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