The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The bar chart represents the information about the
families
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family's
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weekly average expenses for the respective
year
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years
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1968 and 2018.
This
chart explains how weekly
income
are
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is
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spent by each and every family.
The
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Overall
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overall
, in the
year
1968 families spent more
income
in
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on
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food
and in 2018 some families spent
leisure
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more leisure
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time
in
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apply
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more.I will explain about
this
chart in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, there are
some
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many
people
who wish to
spent
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spend
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their money in different sectors based on their
income
. The are eight sectors namely
food
, housing, fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
and personal goods , transport and leisure time.In the
year
2018, leisure stands first because most of the
people
spent more money nearly 23% and in 1968, 8% of
people
spent their money on free time. In 1968,
people
spent less amount in transport for travelling and in the
year
2018 around 14% of
income
are
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was
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spent
for
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on
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transport
by
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
.In 2018 for
food
and
housing
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housing,
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there is only
slight
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a slight
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difference between the
percentage
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percentages
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.
Food
stands first
among
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in
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every sector in the
year
1968.Fuel and power and
personals
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personal
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goods have
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a similiar
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similiar
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similar
percentage
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percentages
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for both
the
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years. In the
year
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years
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2018 and
1968
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1968,
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the
people
spent
same
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the same
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amount of percentage. We would say that
people
have spent their
income
according to
the
income
what
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that
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they earn and
according to
the
people
's interest.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, income, food, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "explains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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