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There is an intensive debate about the value of historical studies in educational institutions. Many individuals believe that there is not a real interest in
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other scholars discuss that the study of previous accidents may help us to understand the current world today .
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the latter opinion is logical, l totally agree with the first group.
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clearer introduction and conclusion to help guide the reader through your argument.
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There should be more detailed explanations and examples to support your main points and demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
You've started with a strong general introduction to the topic and clearly stated your position.
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Good use of contrasting ideas to show that you understand both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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