Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

way to solve
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issue is increasing the price of petrol ,I do not agree with it,because it would
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more problems for poor people and the economy.
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,many countries
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tried
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solution but didn’t get any success from it,the reason why it didn’t work is because poor people couldn’t buy it,it would become a big problem for them and to fix
this
trouble they have to make protest.One clear example is the USA,in 2022 the cost of diesel
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increased to 4
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a
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this
change led to big hate on
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and
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a big protest there.
Secondly
,the economics of
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would go down
due to
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the price of gas,citizens wouldn’t be able to buy the gas and owing to it the economy of
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will go down.
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by increasing the price of petrol
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more persons
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be able to buy it and
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less money would get country ,
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the
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will down.
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the same situation happened in Russia. In conclusion,taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say the worst way to fix the problem of growing traffic and pollution is
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the cost of gas.I believe the most effective measure is
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cycling and walking infrastructure and improve public transport.
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  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
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  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
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