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Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#research #governments #organizations
It is universally acknowledged that
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scientific research plays a key role in diverse spheres of life, and
also
, one of the significant requirements of it is to be supported financially. It is argued that
source
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 of supporting it is
onus
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an onus
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 on governments or
the
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commercial
organizations
. I believe that the governments would be
qualified
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(satisfied)
supporter
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supporters
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 reasonably than the other. It is undeniable that some researches require a huge
budget
 which could be out of access
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 some
organizations
. To put it differently, some international
researches
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researchers
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 need international funds which could be provided
by
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 international accommodation.
For example
, preventing water pollution
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 Sea and treating it
with
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 a feasible way require
international
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 cooperation of different countries,
such
 as Iran, Turkey, and Azerbaijan. the mentioned example could not be possible with the limited
budget
 of
organizations
.
Besides
, some
of
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organizations
 provide their financial requirements through the dedicated fund through Authorities’ decisions.
On the other hand
, these
organizations
 do not have any
motivations
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motivation
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 to participate in sharing
fund
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funds
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, because they
are
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 not
benefited
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.
However
, Authorities with a huge
budget
 can assist research
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which
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will back to them in the long run.
In other words
,
these researches
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this research
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 would be beneficial for authorities.
For instance
, air pollution causes numerous challenges,
such
 as disease and a decrease in
rate
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the rate
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 of tourism. investing
on
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 air pollution
researches
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research
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 could assist
to reduce
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in reducing
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 the dedicated
budget
 for hygiene, so the spent
fund
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funds
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 will back to the government.
Besides
, the power
of implementing
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scientific solutions belongs to authorities. they can develop and adapt the infrastructure with the scientifically state-of-the-art
of
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solution. In conclusion, the necessity of research is evident, and based on governments’ power and various aspects of their effects, the governments’
supportive
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 outweighs the
organizations
’ budgets.
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