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Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#research #governments #organizations
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It is universally acknowledged that
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scientific research plays a key role in diverse spheres of life, and
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, one of the significant requirements of it is to be supported financially. It is argued that
source
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 of supporting it is
onus
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an onus
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 on governments or
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commercial
organizations
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. I believe that the governments would be
qualified
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(satisfied)
supporter
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 reasonably than the other. It is undeniable that some researches require a huge
budget
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 which could be out of access
of
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 some
organizations
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. To put it differently, some international
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researchers
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 need international funds which could be provided
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 international accommodation.
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, preventing water pollution
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the Caspian
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 Sea and treating it
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 a feasible way require
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 cooperation of different countries,
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 as Iran, Turkey, and Azerbaijan. the mentioned example could not be possible with the limited
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 of
organizations
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.
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, some
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organizations
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 provide their financial requirements through the dedicated fund through Authorities’ decisions.
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, these
organizations
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 do not have any
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 to participate in sharing
fund
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funds
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, because they
are
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 not
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.
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, Authorities with a huge
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 can assist research
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which
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will back to them in the long run.
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,
these researches
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this research
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 would be beneficial for authorities.
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, air pollution causes numerous challenges,
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 as disease and a decrease in
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 of tourism. investing
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 air pollution
researches
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 could assist
to reduce
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 the dedicated
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 for hygiene, so the spent
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funds
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 will back to the government.
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, the power
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scientific solutions belongs to authorities. they can develop and adapt the infrastructure with the scientifically state-of-the-art
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solution. In conclusion, the necessity of research is evident, and based on governments’ power and various aspects of their effects, the governments’
supportive
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 outweighs the
organizations
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’ budgets.
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