The chart below shows the number of men and women in future education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full -time or part- time.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, education, time, part, year with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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