The chart below shows the number of men and women in future education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full -time or part- time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in future education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full -time or part- time.
The bar chart represents the number of
men
and
women
infuture
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in future
education
in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying
full
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full-time
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time
or
part
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part-time
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time
for the respective
year
. I will explain about
this
in the following paragraphs.
Overall
, in 1990 -91 more females started their
education
as
part
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time
and it was nearer to 1200. In 1970 -71 within 10 years males
also
started their
education
as
part
time
.
Firstly
,people
has
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a
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option to choose their
education
as
full
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full-time
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time
and
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or
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part
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part-time
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time
. Most of the
men
and
women
started to choose their
part
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part-time
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time
eduction
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education
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. In the
year
1970-71, within 10 years thousands of
mens
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men
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choose their
education
as
part
time
whereas
1990
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in 1990
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-91 , around 1200
womens
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women
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choose their
education
as
part
time
.
Full
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time
education
are
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less compared to
part
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part-time
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time
education
.In the
year
1970-
71
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71,
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both
men
and
women
are in less in
full
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full-time
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time
education
. In the
year
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years
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1980-
81
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81,
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both
men
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amd
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and
women
's
their
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apply
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part
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part-time
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time
education
where
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were
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reduced.In the
year
1990-
91
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91,
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there was a slight increase in
part
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part-time
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time
education
.In the
year
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years
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1970-71
womens
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women's
women
part
time
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part-time
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education
was less and in the
year
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years
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1990-91 it
rosed
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rose
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.
To conclude
, both
the
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apply
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men
and
women
are interested in pursuing their
part
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part-time
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time
education
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, education, time, part, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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