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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph
illusrate
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illustrates
illustrate
 the number of men taking portion in 4 types of
sport
in
particular
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a particular
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 region
withen
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within
this years
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this year
these years
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 from 1985 and 2005.
Infromation
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Information
 in
Rugby
sport
were
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was
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 250
point
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points
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 but in
Badminton
 were
reach
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reached
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 number 50. First of all,in1985,1990,1995,2000 and 2005
the
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apply
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Basketball was
highest
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higher
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 than
Badminton
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in Badminton
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 which got 50.Second of all ,in
exercise
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exercise,
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Rugby
was drop
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dropped
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dramitically
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dramatically
 up to 50 but
Tennis
sport
 was slilty increased up to 250
point
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points
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.
Moreover
, the kind of
this
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these
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 two
sport
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sports
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Rugby
 and
Tennis
were
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apply
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incresed
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increased
 more than Basketball and
Badminton
.
on
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On
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 the other hand,in 1985
Rugby
was get
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got
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 250 higher than
Tennis
 was 150
point
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points
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.
to sum up
,the line gave
many
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apply
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information about four types of
sport
 which
including
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include
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Bsaketball
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Basketball
,
Tennis
,
Badminton
 and
Rugby
 on the
another
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other
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 hand,
in
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apply
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 the above graph shows
the
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apply
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each
sport
 how
reach
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to reach
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th
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the
point
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sport, rugby, point, badminton, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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