The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
propotion
of the population Correct your spelling
proportion
travelled
to one or more Wrong verb form
travelling
museums
over the time interval of 5 years
from 2005 to 2016, against different age groups.
Overall
, the number of young children and teens tend
to visit Correct pronoun usage
who tend
musuem
remains almost constant Correct your spelling
museum
museums
while
, slighter older generation and middle-aged personal showed an increase in percentage over the years
.
Firstly
, teenagers of
Change preposition
in
age
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the age
group
15-24 showed a constant percentage approximately
25% Change preposition
of approximately
on
all 3 Change preposition
in
years
.Further more
, people from 25-34 and 35-44 age groups showed increasing interest Correct your spelling
Furthermore
to visit
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in visiting
museums
from 2006 to 2016.While
,
the first Remove the comma
apply
group
started in 2006 with a little above 25% and gradually increased to a little over 30% in 2016.While
the latter group
which started with
only 20% made a drastic increase and ended Change preposition
at
with
above 35%.
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at
Secondly
, the older generation does not give
much interest in visiting Verb problem
have
the
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apply
museums
.Group
of people between 55 and 64 were fans of Correct article usage
A group
museums
in the initial years
, but they lost interest over the years
and only a little below 30% visited museums
in 2016.In addition
,much
older generation who are above 65, Add an article
the much
they
are not keen to see Correct pronoun usage
apply
museums
, so they kept a much lesser percentage over the years
, nearer to 20%.Submitted by augustinjose99 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museums, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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