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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is suggested by some that inventing a new
language
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 for the sake of global communication is essential.
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, my gut feeling is that there is no need
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this
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.
Language
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 plays a fundamental role in carrying distinctive features of all cultures. It reflects every aspect of the people’s lives. So, to realize cross-culture understanding,
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 each other’s
language
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 should be seen as the most critical approach. Other than that, learning a new
language
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 can be interesting, too.
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 comparing the differences in
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’s own
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 and other
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, people not only acquire more in-depth knowledge about these cultures and people
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they can
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 be amazed by how much difference there is.
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 hand, keeps people learning new cultures through new
languages
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, which can result in better mutual understanding, and more importantly, helps maintain cultural diversity, which is probably
one
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 of the most important driving forces of human development. Meanwhile, the root of a
language
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 lies deeply in the long history of a culture. Almost all
languages
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 have gone through hundreds or even thousands of years of evolution and are still changing as the world itself changes. So, it would be very challenging to just invent a
language
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 without any trace of modification and variation.
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,
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 merging different
languages
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 to form a new
one
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 could be an option, it is still a very demanding mission, because it can be hard to select certain parts out of these
languages
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 to form a new
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.
Not to mention
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 the possible bias in
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 new linguistic system where the less privileged
languages
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 and their users get offended, because they can feel despaired. To wrap up, there is no need to invent a new
language
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 just for the sake of international communication. It would largely do harm to cultural diversity and it can be hard in real
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, too.
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task achievement
The essay addresses the question effectively, presenting clear arguments against inventing a new language for international communication.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and they frame the essay well, providing a clear beginning and a clear end.
coherence cohesion
The arguments are well-supported and the essay maintains a logical structure throughout.

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