Many people believe that cigarette smoking has had a negative impact for far too long and the only solution to end ot, is to make cigarettes illegall worldwide. To what extent to you agree or disagree? Give explanations and examples to support your opinion.
Smoking kills injuries to health. A large number of people think that smoking
cigarettes
creates detrimental effects on the population whether first-hand smokers or second-hand smokers so there is only one way to stop smoking by banned worldwide. I strongly disagree with this
statement because it amplifies cigarette smuggling and there are some other ways to cure this
issue than completely prohibited. This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
To commence with, cigarette's
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cigarette
price
increase
can assist Fix the agreement mistake
increases
to reduce
the purchasing quantity that Change preposition
in reducing
five
times higher than current prices, and Add a missing verb
is five
as a result
, people's buying capacity might be reduced due to
lack of affordability. For example
, the Australian government has imposed a heavy tax on cigarette pockets in order to smoker ratio has finished than before imposing a heavy tax on this
product. When banning cigarettes
completely many illegal smuggling persons use this
chance to sell cigarettes
with a high price
in the black market and this
is not good for any country to improve the black market. Hence
, increasing the price
can reduce the purchasing quantity.
Furthermore
, the authorities should ban public places in smoking such
as shopping malls, hospitals, bus stations, railway stations, parks, and libraries. This
means they create smoking
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a smoking
the smoking
zone
and are in Fix the agreement mistake
zones
the
public places that make Correct article usage
apply
ashamed
and embarrassing moment to Correct pronoun usage
them ashamed
banking
who smoke in Replace the word
bankers
smoking
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the smoking
zone
, so smoking might be reduced. Fix the agreement mistake
zones
For instance
, in India's lung cancer ratio has lessened after installation
of the smoking zones in Correct article usage
the installation
the
public areas because of the population's guilt. Needless to say, completely banning Correct article usage
apply
cigarettes
is not end
for smoking Correct article usage
an end
instead
of
it will Change preposition
apply
increases
among youngsters and children Wrong verb form
increase
also
will start to use it.
In conclusion, cigarettes
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cigarette
making
illegal Verb problem
apply
that
cannot end smoking there Correct pronoun usage
apply
is
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are
another
ways to stop Correct quantifier usage
other
this
like increasing the price
of cigarettes
as well as
creating guilt feel of smokers through
making smoking zones in public locations. Change preposition
by
Therefore
, I strongly disagree with this
statement because it enhances the black market's activities.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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