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Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph provides information about the most popular fuel types in the UK between 1981 and 2000 where 1 energy unit prescribes 1 million tonnes of oil.
Overall
, it is notable that the most popular natural resource during the two decades was petroleum,
while
 coal manufacture gradually declined and natural gas amounts increased towards the end. The fossil oil statistics had a significant increase from 1981 to 1983, rising from 90 to 140
units
 respectively.
This
 level plateaued from 1983 to 1987.
However
, throughout the next 8 years, the petroleum fluctuated by reaching a low of 100
units
 before gradually increasing to 140
units
 in 1996. The remaining 4 calendar years were more stable for petroleum production, ending numbers at 140
units
 in 2000.
In contrast
, coal mining maintained approximately 80
units
 during 1981 and 1983, but experienced a sharp decline until 35
units
 in 1984.
Subsequently
, between 1985 and 1986, coal production significantly increased to 60
units
. Despite
this
 recovery, production steadily decreased until 2000, reaching the level of 35
units
 again. Natural gas numbers,
on the other hand
, remained stable at around 40
units
 between 1981 and 1990.
Nevertheless
,
this
 trend changed over the
last
 decade, as natural gas eventually reached 100
units
 in 2000.
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coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear logical structure with an introduction that outlines the main trends and a concluding statement. However, you might consider adding a stronger concluding remark to summarize the overall trends more compellingly.
task achievement
Make sure to review the language used to describe trends to avoid the repetitive use of the same phrases. For example, instead of repeating 'units', you could vary the language slightly by occasionally referring to 'energy units'.
coherence cohesion
Consider varying sentence structures to maintain reader interest and enhance the flow of the essay. Using subordinate clauses and more complex sentences can improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the task, covering all main trends and making relevant comparisons between the different fuel types.
coherence cohesion
Main points are clearly supported with specific data from the graph, which adds credibility and accuracy to the response.
task achievement
The language used is clear and effective in conveying information, with appropriate vocabulary for describing trends and changes.

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