Cooking food is a waste of time in today’s hectic life. Fast food restaurants are helpful in modern living and it is less stressful. Do you agree or disagree?
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food
is Correct article usage
an essenital
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essential
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of
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being's
survive
. there was a Replace the word
survival
time
when people cook
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cooked
food
twice in
a day in Change preposition
apply
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home but now Correct your spelling
every
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the time
time
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times
has
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have
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to Add a missing verb
are willing
ear
outside Correct your spelling
eat
food
or fast food
.
In todays
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today's
mordern
world, where everyone is doing Correct your spelling
modern
job
and living in a hectic Add an article
the job
a job
envirnoment
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environment
however
some peoples still like to cook for themself and there
family.
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their
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today's
food
insted
of cooking Correct your spelling
instead
food
at home as it is time consuming
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time-consuming
moreover
cooking required patience and efforts
and fast Fix the agreement mistake
effort
food
provide a good amount of comfort in this
hectic and stressfull
schedule.
In my Correct your spelling
stressful
opnion
, I Correct your spelling
opinion
totely
disagree that cooking is Correct your spelling
totally
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a wast
wast
of Correct your spelling
waste
time
and the subsitute
of home made Correct your spelling
substitute
food
is fast food
, furthermore
I support homemade cooking as it gives us Add a comma
furthermore,
huge
amount of benefits like Add an article
a huge
healthy
body, Add an article
a healthy
healthy
mind, Correct article usage
a healthy
satisfaction
of eating Add an article
the satisfaction
a satisfaction
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a hygenic
hygenic
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hygienic
food
and feeling of fullfilment
, Correct your spelling
fulfilment
morever
it Correct your spelling
moreover
save
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saves
lot
of money.
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a lot
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those who are working can take Add a comma
However,
help
of machines and equipment Correct article usage
the help
while
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly define your position in the introduction. Your current stance is somewhat clear, but it could be more explicit. You might want to state directly that you believe cooking is not a waste of time and that fast food is not a good substitute for homemade food.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, you can mention studies or personal anecdotes that highlight the benefits of cooking at home.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your arguments are developed logically. This will improve the logical structure of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Make better use of transitional phrases to connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will make your essay more cohesive and easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Work on having a clearer and more succinct conclusion that summarizes your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Review the grammar and spelling errors to make your essay more polished. For example, 'essenital' should be 'essential,' 'mordern' should be 'modern,' and 'envirnoment' should be 'environment.'
task achievement
You show an understanding of the topic and present arguments from both sides, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
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Your ideas about the benefits of home-cooked food, such as health and cost-saving, are relevant and insightful.
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