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The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The pie chart describes the activities performed by the
people
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 living in the UK, and how these habits changed from 1971 to 2001. The units were measured in percentage.
Overall
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, both graphs showed the highest proportion of
food
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 and
cars
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. In 1971 most
people
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 indulged themselves in
food
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 and
cars
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 and the least number of
people
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 gave their
time
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 to book.
While
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 in the
year
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 2001, the opposite occurred, they
also
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 spent much
time
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 on
cars
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 and
food
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 but less
time
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 on books. Starting with the
year
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 1971, in
this
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year
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 majority of
people
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 spent
time
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 having great
food
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 and
cars
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 about 44% of
people
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 were involved in the activities of
food
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 and about 22% were involved in
cars
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. The remaining includes petrol, furniture, restaurants and books about 10,9 and 7
percent
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per cent
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 respectively. The
last
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time
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 was
spend
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spent
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 on computers that
time
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 and just about 2%
spend
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spent
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time
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 on
this
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 one.
On the other hand
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, in the
year
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 2001 slight changes occurred the ratio for
cars
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 increased to about 43% from 22% in
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year
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the year
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 2001 and for
food
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 it dropped to 14% from 44%. In regards to others as well showed a slight variation and
least
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the least
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 number of
people
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 were interested in reading books only about 1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, cars, time, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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