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The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts the proportion of three different types of nutrients,
such
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 as sodium, saturated fat, and
sugar
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 which are consumed during
breakfast
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,
lunch
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,
dinner
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 and
snacks
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. Sodium intake had the lowest
percentage
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 of consumption in
breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 accounting for 14%, followed by
lunch
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 at 29%.
However
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, it reaches its highest
percentage
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on
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for
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dinner
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 at 43%. Saturated fat consumption is at its peak during
dinner
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for
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 37%; yet, the lowest
percentage
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 was in
breakfast
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 at 16%. Meanwhile,
in
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lunch
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 and
snacks
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, the
percentage
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 is only 21% and 26% respectively. As much as 16% of
sugar
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 is consumed during
breakfast
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, which number is lower compared to
lunch
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 and
dinner
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 at 19% and 23%. Different from the other two nutrients, people consume
sugar
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 the most not in
dinner
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 but in
snacks
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 at 42%.
To conclude
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, the intake of the three nutrients is at their lowest level
in
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breakfast
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, but the consumption of Sodium and Fat is at the pinnacle
on
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at
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dinner
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, except for
sugar
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 which is
on
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in
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snacks
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, breakfast, lunch, dinner, snacks, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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