Some people say that playing computergames is bad for children in every aspect. Ohters say that palying computergames can have positive effects on the way children develop. Discuss both views and give youre opinion.

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of
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games
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on the youth is one of the most debated
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this
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century. Some
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believe that
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games
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have
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the potential
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to help youngsters to improve,
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, others
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that
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only
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adverse consequences on the
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's developmental stage.
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essay will consider
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each aspect and mention my own point. On the one hand, there are several reasons explaining
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benefits of playing
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games
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, some
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games
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occupy tasks, which would need critical thinking ability to overcome them. Leading to
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effect on
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's thinking process.
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, there are lots of logical
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aimed to boost
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skills of the players by giving tasks.
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, to cope
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they need to think logically and strategically at the same time.
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,
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of the
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that are played widely are online-multiplayer
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. Making it possible for players to
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a conversation with other
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.
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,
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who play them tend to have better communication skills than
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those who
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do not play them.
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, it is true that there are lots of
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cases where
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games
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affected negatively on
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's lives.
Video
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games
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are usually created to attract players so that
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can make a profit.
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, to attract them they are more likely to add unreal functions to their game,
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as killing zombies or even humans.
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potentially leads to
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children
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addicted to them and
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their time inconveniently.
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, those
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which
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include
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lots of violence or inappropriate
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rot kids'
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brains
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. To give an example,
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of playing too
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computer
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games
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which are improper for
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, they tend to misbehave because of their inability to
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comprehend
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real life and
video
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games
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that
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games
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can have side effects
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as bad
time-management
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and
misbehaviors
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misbehavior
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.
However
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, from another perspective, in terms of acquiring skills for
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themselves,
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videogames
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video games
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proved its point in being beneficial for
children
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to some extent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • physical activity
  • violent content
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • strategic thinking
  • hand-eye coordination
  • educational games
  • interactive learning
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication skills
  • academic performance
  • stress relief
  • mental health
  • parental guidance
  • moderation
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