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Band 1

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s life To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At the moment, all of the students who are learning
English
 have a problem. They don't know how can make better
an
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each part
in
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 the IELTS. They think it is enough that know grammar and
learning
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 new words.
For example
,
for improving
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English
 is advised
watching
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English
 films. But watching has
an
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 own conditions too.
Firstly
, a part of
film
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 namely, ten minutes must be
make
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watched and must learn
a
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new words in
this
 part. After have
been
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learnt, must watch a film more.
And making
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 it regularly improves your speaking and writing skills too. And note
this
, you must spend so much time
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to learn
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English
. And actions which you are doing don't have to stop for one day and it must
be continue
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coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion to structure your essay better. These sections help guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
Make sure to provide specific examples and details to thoroughly support your points. This will strengthen your argument.
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Try to use more varied sentence structures and complex grammatical forms to demonstrate a higher level of proficiency.
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Your suggestions for improving English skills are practical and actionable, showing a good understanding of the topic.
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Your essay has a clear focus on the topic of improving English skills, which keeps it relevant and on-topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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