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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph compares the percentage of
people
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 dwelling in urban
area
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areas
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 in four Asian nations between 1970 and 2040, including the projection data for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, what stands out from
this
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 graph is that the percentages of all given countries show an upward trend, and the proportion of
Malaysian
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Malaysians
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 living in cities is the highest among
four
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the four
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 given countries
in
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apply
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most time, except for in 1970 and
in
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apply
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1990. In 1980, city residents only accounted for 30% of Malaysian
people
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.
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 number rose consistently in
following
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the following
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 years and is expected to peak at approximately 80% in 2040. The percentage of
people
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 living in cities in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was just over 30% in 1970, which was slightly higher than the figure for Malaysia.
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, after a
sharpe
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sharp
 rise to 50% in 1990, it remained at the level between 40% and 50% from 1990 to 2020, and is projected to reach 50% in 2040. Concerning the figure for Thailand, it was just under 20% in 1980 and increased steadily until 2020, at 30%.
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 number is predicted to
rose
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stabely
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steadily
 by around 8% per year and eventually reach around 45% in 2040. The percentage of
people
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 living in urban
area
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areas
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 in Indonesia was the lowest in 1970, but it performed
similar
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with
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to
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 that of Malaysia, skyrocketing from 13% in 1970 to 50% in 2020.
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 number is projected to increase to about 60%
at the end
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 of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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