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Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #lessons #group
Nowadays, many
people
 prefer to
study
 with many
people
 and they think that it is better
then
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 one-on-one
lessons
. In recent times, numerous
students
 want to
study
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in
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with
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group
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the group
a group
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 and
i
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I
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 prefer to
study
 with
group
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a group
the group
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, too. The reason why,
i
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I
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 think if
i
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study
 one-on-one
lessons
, in
fact
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fact,
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i
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I
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 will boring.
Nonetheless
,
in
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one-on-one
lessons
 have advantages, too. Because, if you
study
 in
that
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those
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lessons
, you understand things and you can get knowledge better
then
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than
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group
lessons
 and many
people
 think that, too. If children
study
 in
group
lessons
, they can find friends and other successful things. But from my point of view, in every
educations
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education
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,
the
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one-on-one
lessons
 are more expensive
then
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than
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group
lessons
 and may be beyond many parent's means ,
thus
 many
people
 prefer
group
lesson
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lessons
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.
In addition
, the one-on-one
lessons
 are boring to teachers, too.
On the contrary
, numerous amount of
students
 are taking their education in 50-100
students
 batch, evidently
group
study
 has its own perks. To be more specific, some learners carry reserved behaviour towards their teacher, but attending
lessons
 in a
group
 provides them with a comfortable environment and peer support during studies, empowering them to grasp more in their brain.
To begin
 with, when
students
 are alone with
teacher
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the teacher
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, they have more time to delve into problems, and
following
this
 teacher can explain the title more
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In addition
, the
amount
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 of distractions in
this
 kind of
classes
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class
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are
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 considerably low,
which
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and
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 the mentioned student is able to focus on
subject
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the subject
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 more.
For example
, in a private course, the pupil cannot be distracted by other
students
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students'
student's
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 conversations or actions. In a nutshell,
although
 both situations have their own pros and cons, I opine that
,
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 private teaching is unquestionably best, because of the personal attention, which
students
gets
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.
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coherence cohesion
Consider the structure of your essay more carefully. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas progress logically. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction should clearly state both views and your own opinion in order to frame the essay effectively.
task achievement
Ensure that your main points are well-supported with relevant and specific examples. This strengthens your argument and demonstrates a thorough understanding of the topic.
general
Some sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkwardly phrased. Review these sentences to ensure clarity and correctness.
task achievement
You addressed both views on the topic and provided your own opinion, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
You have included some good points about the advantages and disadvantages of both one-on-one and group lessons.

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