Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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coherence cohesion
Consider the structure of your essay more carefully. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas progress logically. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction should clearly state both views and your own opinion in order to frame the essay effectively.
task achievement
Ensure that your main points are well-supported with relevant and specific examples. This strengthens your argument and demonstrates a thorough understanding of the topic.
general
Some sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkwardly phrased. Review these sentences to ensure clarity and correctness.
task achievement
You addressed both views on the topic and provided your own opinion, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
You have included some good points about the advantages and disadvantages of both one-on-one and group lessons.

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