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It is important for foreigners to know something about the history and culture of the country they live in.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#foreigners #history #culture #country
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Nowadays most
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of
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the
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people
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to travelling
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 abroad for
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a job
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job
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a job
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 or business. Whilst, they must
be know
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 about the alien
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country
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country's
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lifestyle
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 and history.
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,
the
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foreigners can survive that new nations.
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 essay is going to discuss
about
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this
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 topic.
Initially
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,
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 universe has encompassed a
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 of
countries
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 and some of them are economically strong
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 others are weak.
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,
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lot
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a lot
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 of
people
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 are trying to migrate to another
country
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 for searching job or
doing
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 some business.
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, they have to learn
the
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about the
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 foreign
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country
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country's
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 culture. To illustrate. my
country
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everyperson
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every person
 eating by hand. whilst,
european
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European
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 and
american
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countries
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 they are using
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 or fork to use for eating.
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,
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 code
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also
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 totally
diffrent
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different
most
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in most
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of
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the
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asian
countries
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people
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 especially, women are fully covered but in
western
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countries
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 totally different. So,
people
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 who are staying outside of
thieir
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their
 native
country
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 should learn and be aware of the alien
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country
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country's
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 culture.
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, history is
diffrent
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different
 between each
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countries
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.
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, migrants should be
study
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 about that
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country
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 past.
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 can help them to
surivive
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survive
that
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in that
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country
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. Because
,
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 my home
country
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 there are several temples
was
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 built by kings.
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,
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lot
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a lot
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 of foreigners are coming to visit our place
alos
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also
 they are all endeavouring to imitate our
ancister
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ancestors
ancestor
canister
lifestyle
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. To illustrate,
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lot
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a lot
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 of
americans
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 are working in
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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 and egypt
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 still they are
eagerly
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still eagerly
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 practicing their
lifestyle
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.
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, migrants should
be learn
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learn
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 about the alien
country
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people
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people's
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lifestyle
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 and history.
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 only, they can survive and live a peaceful life in a foreign
country
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