t is arguable that some proponents believe domestic waste is not recycled properly by people and they want the government to take action to encourage people recycling their trash. In my opinion, I agree that the government should issue laws to prevent this phenomenon. This essay will provide my perspective and give some possible reasons.

It is arguable that some proponents believe domestic
waste
is not recycled properly by
people
and they want the
government
to take action to encourage
people
recycling
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their
trash
. In my opinion, I agree that the
government
should issue
laws
to prevent
this
phenomenon.
This
essay will provide my perspective and give some possible reasons. First and foremost, governments imposing
laws
will have a host of drawbacks. Nowadays,
people
have the tendency to throw away
trash
without trying to separate
non recyclable
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non-recyclable
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trash
and recyclable
trash
.
For example
,
people
have a trend to use plastic bags, cups, and take-a-away containers and
this
will lead to
the
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categorizing
trash
will be harder. If the
government
issues
laws
that make citizens sort out
waste
,
this
will raise the unpleasant feelings of
people
towards them,
causing
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the recycling of domestic
waste
more
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harder
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and
more
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harder.
On the other hand
, despite all the negative effects
aforementioned
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, imposing
laws
will bring a number of benefits
for
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the environment. Governments should issue
laws
that charge a heavy fine to household
waste
which does not categorize their
trash
from recyclable and
non recyclable
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non-recyclable
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trash
, making them aware of the importance of separate
waste
.
Moreover
, the
government
can launch a campaign in order to encourage
people
to recycle or reuse
trash
instead
of throwing it away.
For example
, campaigns, which take place in parks and schools, to inform
people
, especially children, which
trash
is recyclable and which is reusable not only to raise
the
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people
’s awareness and willingness to sort out
trash
but
also
teach students how important their act of recycling can affect the environment. In conclusion, it is best that governments should act immediately to encourage
people
to recycle their domestic
waste
in order to protect the environment.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
The logical structure of your essay is generally clear and the points are presented in a coherent manner.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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