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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart here illustrates the portion of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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, who were illiterate, across six regions, that are, developed
countries
, Latin America/Caribbean, East
Asia
/Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
, in
last
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 year.
Overall
, illiteracy among
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are
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 more prevalent than
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among male
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male
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males
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 in all
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categories
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. The most illiterate
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 were from South
asia
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Asia
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,
whereas
least
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the least
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 were from developed
countries
.
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 of
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males
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, illiteracy in developed
countries
were
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 near zero.
However
, in Sub-Saharan Africa and South
Asia
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Asia,
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 that
number
 is more than 30%. Arab States are
simillar
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similar
 as it is just below 30% there. In Latin America and East
Asia
,
this
number
 is at 10% and below respectively. For the female, the statistic
is mirroring
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 the males, as the developed
countries
 had illiteracy just above zero
percent
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per cent
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. But in South
Asia
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Asia,
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 that
number
 is at
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a staggering
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number
 of around 55%. In Sub-Saharan Africa and Arab States,
this
 rate is around 50% of
population
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. The
number
 dropped to 20% in East
Asia
 and hovering above 10% in Latin America.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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