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some people think that people that we should invent a new language for international communication. Will the benefits of this outweigh the problems associated with it?

#people #language #communication #outweigh
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It is
common
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bilief
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belief
 that people should create a new divergent type of language should be created with the purpose of bridging the
communicate
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international
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the international
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 gap. Personally,
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claim
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 that the drawbacks of time need
organize
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 and harmful
matter
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 for local culture superior
than
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 the benefit of globalization.
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task achievement
Clarify and structure your main points more effectively. Make sure each idea is clear and well-supported.
coherence cohesion
To improve cohesion, ensure that each paragraph builds logically on the previous one. Use clear connecting phrases.
task achievement
You have presented a clear position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction does a good job of setting up the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International communication
  • Cultural unity
  • Trade and business facilitation
  • Language barriers
  • Global education systems
  • International diplomacy
  • Political negotiations
  • Linguistic and cultural identities
  • Resistance
  • Native languages
  • Implementation challenges
  • Vocabulary and grammar rules
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