The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children, men and women eating fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children, men and women eating fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.
The bar chart shows the percentage of
daily
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the daily
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amount of
fruit
and
vegetables
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vegetable
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children
,
men
and
women
are having
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had
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in
United
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the United
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Kingdom from 2001 to 2008.
It is clear that
women
had the highest
proportion
of
fruit
compared to
men
and
children
.
In addition
, all
children
,
men
and
women
eating
fruit
and vegetables increased but
also
had a decrease in
latest
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the last
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2 years. We can see that
women
's amount of
fruit
and
vegeatable
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vegetable
vegetables
daily eaten slightly rose every year from 2001 to 2005 registering 23% in 2001, 24% in 2002, 27% in 2003, 28% in 2004 and 30% in 2005.
Then
, the
proportion
had a rapid increase in 2006, rising to 35 % in 2006. From 2007, there was a decline from 32% to 30% in 2008. The
proportion
was followed by
men
but had a different trend compared to
women
. The percentage of
men
eating
fruit
and vegetables daily remained constant from 2001 to 2003 at 18% and
then
gradually increased until 2006 from 20% in 2004, 23% in 2005 and 28% in 2006. In 2007 the figure remained stable. Same as
women
,
men
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and men
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also
had a decrease in the
proportion
from 2007 to 2008,
28
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% to 26%.
Children
had a similar trend where the figures maintained at the same level from 2001 to 2003 which was 13% followed by a gentle rise to 18% in 2004, 19% in 2005 and 22% in 2006. In 2007 the percentage reached
the
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a
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peak at 27% and
then
dropped to 26% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, children, men, women, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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