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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Other say countries should have their own law. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 some people think it is best to have a single legal
system
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 between
countries
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,
Althoug
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Although
 others believe that each
country
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 should have its own legal
system
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. Both points are true, but sometimes one legal
system
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 can fail. There are several problems with having a single legal
system
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 around the world.
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, the fact that the
religion
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religions
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 and traditions of some
countries
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 differ from each other does not allow the effective functioning of the single right between the
countries
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.
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, a single legal
system
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 may limit the freedom of the population.
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, before introducing a single law in the world, it is necessary to study the origin of the states. Each
country
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 should have its own law. Because the common origin of the
country
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 may not be the same as other
countries
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.
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, the legal
system
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 of the American state and the laws of Uzbekistan are completely incompatible. Because the legal consciousness of the American people is stronger than that of our people.
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, if each
country
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 implements its own law and legal
system
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, it can work more effectively than a single legal
system
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. In conclusion,
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 the idea of a single global legal
system
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 has its advantages, it is more practical and beneficial for each region to maintain its own legal
system
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.
This
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 approach respects the cultural and historical differences between
countries
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 and ensures more effective and appropriate governance
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grammar mechanics
Work on grammar and mechanics, especially with regard to sentence construction and connectors. This will help in improving the flow and readability of your essay.
development
You mentioned some valid points, such as differences in religion and traditions, but ensure these are fully developed and connected to your main argument.
examples development
Provide additional relevant and concrete examples that can comprehensively support your points. This provides a strong foundation and helps in achieving higher scores in Task Achievement.
introduction
The introduction clearly sets up the topic and makes the reader aware of the discussion points.
conclusion
Your conclusion succinctly wraps up the discussion, reiterating the main argument effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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