Hello Uncle, I hope you are doing well as well as Aunty is also good. I read in the newspaper that there was a huge flood in London last week and the place you are staying was not impacted a lot.

Hello Uncle, I hope you are doing well
as well as
Aunty is
also
good. I read in the newspaper that there was a huge flood in London
last
week and the place you are staying was not impacted a lot. I am writing to inform you that one of my
friend
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is visiting London next week for his higher education.
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introduction conclusion present
The essay needs a clearer introduction and conclusion to frame your message better. Start with a general statement and end with a summary of your main points.
relevant specific examples
Make sure to provide more specific details and examples to support your statements. For example, mention specific reasons or benefits your friend might gain by studying in London.
clear comprehensive ideas
You've made a good start by informing your uncle about your friend's visit. The point is clear and directly communicated.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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