Some people get into debt by buying thing they do not need and cannot afford. What is the reason for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?
These days a lot of
people
bought
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buy
things
they do not need and cannot afford. The main reason for this
behaviour
because people
buying
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buy
things
they think they need. To tackle this
issue people
need to be aware about
what they Change the preposition
of
are
really need.
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apply
People
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in reccent
reccent
days bought many Correct your spelling
recent
things
, although
they are do
not Verb problem
apply
need
. Wrong verb form
needed
This
behaviour
depends on many factors. Firstly
, some people
influenced by advertisements, so when they are seen
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see
somthing
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something
in
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on
tv
or Correct your spelling
TV
in
social media they think they Change preposition
on
are need
. Change the verb form
are needed
Secondly
, other people
just like buying things
when they are in bad
mood or in Correct article usage
a bad
difficult
situation. Add an article
a difficult
For example
, a study at Harvard University shows that people
have
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apply
binge buying
when they have a bad time. Buyer Add a hyphen
binge-buying
behaviour
depends on their mood and what they see in
social media and advertisements.
To handle Change preposition
on
this
issue people
need to be aware about
what they buying and when. Some Change the preposition
of
people
going
to someone Wrong verb form
go
experts
in buying Fix the agreement mistake
expert
behaviour
to ask him help
. Change preposition
for help
For instance
, my friend when he was in the
early twenties Change the word
his
suffering
in his financial status because he was Wrong verb form
suffered
debt
to Change preposition
in debt
buying
Wrong verb form
buy
things
he do
not really need. Another solution, banks need to change their policies regarding debt.
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did
To sum up
, some individuals get into debt by buying things
they do not really need and cannot replace. The reasons for this
behaviour
it because
some Correct word choice
that
people
buying
anything they Wrong verb form
buy
seen
in advertisements or Wrong verb form
see
in
social media and others Change preposition
on
buying
Wrong verb form
buy
things
when they are be
in critical Change the verb form
are
situation
. To tackle Fix the agreement mistake
situations
this
issue people
need to be aware and go to experts person to help them in their financial status.Submitted by reem.b.albalawi on
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