Some people get into debt by buying thing they do not need and cannot afford. What is the reason for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?
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people
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buy
things
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people
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buy
things
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about
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really need.
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are need
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things
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help
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for help
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in debt
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things
he Use synonyms
do
not really need. Another solution, banks need to change their policies regarding debt.
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things
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because
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that
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people
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