The graph below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare need went unmet in the past year from 2008 to 2022 in 6 different European nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make coparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare need went unmet in the past year from 2008 to 2022 in 6 different European nations.

Summarise the information by selecting  and reporting the main features, and make coparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the proportion of government spending on three sectors between 2008 and 2020.
Overall
, the spending on
educational
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the educational
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sector
remained at almost the same level,
while
the other sectors experienced dramatic changes. In the initial term, the government spent a large amount of the revenue on the defence
sector
, at over 20%,
while
educational
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the educational
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and
health
sectors received the same funds, at around 7%.
Thereafter
, the budget for
health
gradually increased and reached approximately 20% in the final year. On the other opposite scale, governmental money for defence rapidly decreased below 10% in the middle term(1979-1988), when the share of
health
exceeded its figure at just 10%, with its figure dropping to about 5% in 2020. Regarding education, its proportion was relatively stable. It experienced somewhat fluctuation ranging between about 7% and roughly 13%. In 1990, when the percentage of the
health
sector
surpassed the educational
sector
, the share of education
recorded
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at around 12%.
Then
, the spending on education slightly declined to about 10%, with a little fluctuation.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unmet healthcare needs
  • Percentage of adults
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Comparative overview
  • Consistent patterns
  • Economic status
  • Healthcare systems
  • Policy changes
  • Anomalies in data
  • Year-by-year comparison
  • Rising/declining trend
  • Evaluate improvements
  • External factors
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