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Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?

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offspring, the influence of
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off
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 all, the effect of parenting can be useful for
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child
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, there are several
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advantages which can enhance younger to be better and will have good manner.
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 of manner, the most important ways to improve how a
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a
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parents
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 behaviour.
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 bad behaviour
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to
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children,
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their
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act
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 as well.
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, teaching them
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environment
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 of
home
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 is one of the best ways.
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ingcreasing
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increasing
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 is considered by parenting classes can develop them in their field. because
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parent
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knows the ability of a
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,
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time
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 to teach their act and insight is vital, especially for a
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child's
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 to study with a
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their parents
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parents
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time
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study
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parents
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behavior
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. they should always have much
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 their
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children.

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task achievement
Work on sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity and correctness. For example, 'it is argue that' should be 'it is argued that,' and 'offspring' should be replaced with 'child.'
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using a variety of linking words and phrases. Avoid repetitive phrases and ensure smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and attempts to provide reasoning and examples to support the viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
There are clear attempts to structure the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline techniques
  • conflict resolution
  • child development stages
  • parental confidence
  • unified approach
  • parenting roles
  • child-rearing
  • preventative measure
  • effective communication
  • common pitfalls
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