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Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #benefit #development #child #mother #father #classes
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 that to advantages the growth of
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offspring, the influence of
parents
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this
 statement.
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off
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 all, the effect of parenting can be useful for
child
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, there are several
of
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advantages which can enhance younger to be better and will have good manner.
in
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term
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 of manner, the most important ways to improve how a
child
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become
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a
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 example for them.
As a result
, it will be influenced by
parents
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 behaviour.
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,
parents
 who
has
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 bad behaviour
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to
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 their
a
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children,
this
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to
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their
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act
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 as well.
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, teaching them
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environment
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 of
home
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 is one of the best ways.
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,
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ingcreasing
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increasing
 of a
child
 is considered by parenting classes can develop them in their field. because
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parent
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a parent
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who
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knows the ability of a
child
,
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, available
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time
 to teach their act and insight is vital, especially for a
childrens
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child's
 ability, if
parents
 do not have
time
 to study with a
child
 it will get
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 effect and can be worn for their
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.
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younger that they have a bad attitude because
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the
enviroment
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environment
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such
 as, they never get a great education
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parents
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their parents
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acts
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.
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there should
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 be awareness for
a
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 younger,
this
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parents
 have to do for
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their well-being
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. In conclusion, teaching a
child
 when they still have
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time
study
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 with
a
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parents
 is
significant
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ways
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 to improve
of
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behavior
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. as
parents
. they should always have much
time
to
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 their
a
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children.
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task achievement
Work on sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity and correctness. For example, 'it is argue that' should be 'it is argued that,' and 'offspring' should be replaced with 'child.'
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using a variety of linking words and phrases. Avoid repetitive phrases and ensure smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and attempts to provide reasoning and examples to support the viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
There are clear attempts to structure the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline techniques
  • conflict resolution
  • child development stages
  • parental confidence
  • unified approach
  • parenting roles
  • child-rearing
  • preventative measure
  • effective communication
  • common pitfalls
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