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The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates information about the month of sales of four items(Caffee, Tea,
Pastries
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, and
Sandwiches
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), times between7:30 a.m. to 8:30 p.m. in
coffee
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 shop in an office building on a regularly weekday.
Overall
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, In the morning and afternoon
Pastries
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 have popular item, yet in two other times people prefer by
Sandwiches
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 and
Coffee
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.
According to
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 chart, people start to go to the cafe in 7:30 a.m
also
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, in
this
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 time until 10:30 they like reserve breakfast
Pastries
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 and
Coffee
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 with 275 and 265 figures thenTea, and
Sandwiches
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 respectively.
However
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, for snake they have other situation the number of
Sandwiches
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 and
Coffee
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 are 200 and 185 in 10:30-2:30. The table shows, in the afternoon between 2:30-5:30, they are so tired, for the employees have same booking as morning, but less so that, the number of
Pastries
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 and
Coffee
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 are 150 and 145.
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, in the evening we can see the same items as midday, yet these items have some contrast because the
Coffee
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 are more than
sandwiches
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 so, that have 200 and 110 number.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pastries, sandwiches, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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