Topic: In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

All cars , buses and trucks will be without
driver
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due to
improvement
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of
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technology. So , only passengers go inside
this
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these
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vehicles.
It is clear that
there are some
advantages
and some
disadvantages
in
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issue
. I will explain more in
futhure
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further
paragraphs and give my own opinion.
To begin
with , the role of drivers
in
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the roads will fade in the future
,
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since technology has been improved and driving
job's
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be
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vanished
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as soon as possible.
Hence
, creates some problems because of
this
issue
.
For instance
, if there is a negative
happen
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, nobody can solve and control that.
On the other hand
, it may cars or buses can not
to
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be stopped
at
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necessary situations.
Fortunatly
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Fortunately
, there are many
advantages
in
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this
topic and It is my notion that the
advantages
of driverless
outweight
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outweigh
the
disadvantages
.
For example
,
in
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with
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this
technology , we do not need
to
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human energy and it
get
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saved in society for other essential jobs.
Moreover
,
this vehicles
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this vehicle
these vehicles
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be regulated with advanced machines.
As a consequence
, There is not any human error on the roads.
Thus
, there is
not
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no
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accident in the world. So , it has
direct
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affect
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on people's health in their lives.
To sum up
, everything has
its
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own
the
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advantages
and
the
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disadvantages
. But it is undeniable that in
this
issue
the
advantages
are more than the
disadvantages
considerably
especialy
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especially
due to
health's
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health
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issue
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issues
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.
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task achievement
You have introduced the topic and given a brief overview of the advantages and disadvantages. However, make sure to clarify your opinions in the introduction and conclusion clearly.
task achievement
Include specific examples or data to support your points. This will strengthen the essay and make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Each paragraph should discuss a clear and separate point related to the topic.
coherence cohesion
Be conscious of grammatical issues, such as subject-verb agreement and sentence structure, to improve readability.
task achievement
You have made a valid attempt to discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame your essay well.

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