Topic: In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
All cars , buses and trucks will be without
driver
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drivers
due to
improvement
Fix the agreement mistake
improvements
of
technology. So , only passengers go inside Change preposition
in
this
vehicles. Correct determiner usage
these
It is clear that
there are some advantages
and some disadvantages
in this
issue
. I will explain more in futhure
paragraphs and give my own opinion.
Correct your spelling
further
To begin
with , the role of drivers in
the roads will fade in the future Change preposition
on
,
since technology has been improved and driving Remove the comma
apply
job's
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jobs
job
be
Verb problem
will
vanished
as soon as possible. Wrong verb form
vanish
Hence
, creates some problems because of this
issue
.For instance
, if there is a negative happen
, nobody can solve and control that.Wrong verb form
happening
On the other hand
, it may cars or buses can not to
be stopped Change the verb form
apply
at
necessary situations.
Change preposition
in
Fortunatly
, there are many Correct your spelling
Fortunately
advantages
in
Change preposition
to
this
topic and It is my notion that the advantages
of driverless outweight
the Correct your spelling
outweigh
disadvantages
.For example
, in
Change preposition
with
this
technology , we do not need to
human energy and it Change preposition
apply
get
saved in society for other essential jobs. Change the verb form
gets
Moreover
, this vehicles
be regulated with advanced machines. Change the determiner
this vehicle
these vehicles
As a consequence
, There is not any human error on the roads. Thus
, there is not
accident in the world. So , it has Correct your spelling
no
direct
Add an article
a direct
affect
on people's health in their lives.
Replace the word
effect
To sum up
, everything has its
own Replace the word
it's
it is
the
Correct article usage
apply
advantages
and the
Correct article usage
apply
disadvantages
. But it is undeniable that in this
issue
the advantages
are more than the disadvantages
considerably especialy
Correct your spelling
especially
due to
health's
Change noun form
health
issue
.Fix the agreement mistake
issues
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task achievement
You have introduced the topic and given a brief overview of the advantages and disadvantages. However, make sure to clarify your opinions in the introduction and conclusion clearly.
task achievement
Include specific examples or data to support your points. This will strengthen the essay and make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Each paragraph should discuss a clear and separate point related to the topic.
coherence cohesion
Be conscious of grammatical issues, such as subject-verb agreement and sentence structure, to improve readability.
task achievement
You have made a valid attempt to discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame your essay well.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.