Environemntal issues such as climate changehave always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure your essay has a clear and logical structure. Divide the essay into paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single main point that supports your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the issue and briefly outlines the main points that you will discuss in the essay. Similarly, provide a conclusion that summarizes your arguments and reiterates your stance.
task achievement
To achieve a higher task response score, provide more specific reasons, examples, and evidence to support your view. This will help demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic and make your argument more persuasive.
task achievement
Develop your main points in greater detail. For example, specify what kinds of harsh punishments governments should impose and provide examples of successful environmental policies from around the world.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear stance on the issue by agreeing with the statement that harsh punishments are necessary to address environmental problems.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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