The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.
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The diagrams show the structure of the hydro-power plant and the location at which it could be placed.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the more expensive hydro-power station generates larger amounts of electricity, compared to the cheaper one. The structure of the wave-energy
machine
is comprised of two chambers, one for holding water and the other for
air
. There are two holes at which the
air
enters and leaves.
Furthermore
, when the water fills the water chamber, it pushes the
air
into the turbines, where it spins to create electricity.
After
this
, the
air
leaves the
machine
through the
air
outlet. When considering the location suitable for the installation of the hydro-powered machines, the
machine
in deep waters produces a high output;
however
, the cost involved in constructing
this
is high.
On the other hand
, the shallow-based
machine
that deals with small waves produces lesser output compared to the deep ones, but the amount of money required to build
this
is low.
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