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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 image illustrates a map
regarding
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 the
city
 of Brandfield. Planners decided to construct a shopping mall in the area, where
to
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two
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 potential sites are listed
such
 as S1 which is located on the North side near a residential estate
on the contrary
of
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to
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 S2 which is situated on the
South east
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Southeast
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,
alonside
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alongside
 the
Indusrial
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Industrial
 Estate. On the one hand, S1 is an excellent site for
people
 living in houses, because it is closer than S2 and benefits them with being able to go walking
while
 having an exceptional look at the river, it
also
 helps with the
City
 centre being close to the mall, so that it's exposed to more
people
 and many can access it without any problem.
On the other hand
, S2 can
also
 be an extraordinary area to build the commercial
center
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centre
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 because of its far away site where traffic will not be considered as a huge problem and still, the
people
 can come from the
City
 centre without any problem and
acces
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access
 the commercial
center
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centre
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 without having problems. S1 and S2 are both glorious places to build a shopping
center
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centre
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,
although
 when comparing both of them we can note each one's cons
such
 as S1 causing traffic for
people
 living in the
city
while
 S2 is
on
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in
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 a noisy area because of the incoming
constructing
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construction
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 noises in the
Industial
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Industrial
 site.
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  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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