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The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The
given
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apply
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bar charts clearly illustrate learners who
work not
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worked
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 full-time
work
 after graduation and postgraduation in the UK in 2008.
Overall
, the popular decision after graduation is having
futher
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further
 study
in
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at
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 both graduation
level
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levels
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 in the given time
However
, voluntary
work
 had the lowest score in the given 4 categories for graduated people. Looking at the UK graduates, keep studying
further
 had the highest number with 29.665 students. The second most popular option was getting part-time
work
 which was higher than
being
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apply
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unemployment with 1500 candidates, 17,735 and 16,235 respectively.
Moreover
, Voluntary
work
 had the lowest with 3500,
this
 number was approximately 3 times lower than the
amount
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number
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 of people who
are
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were
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unemployment
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unemployed
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 in 2008.
According to
 the UK postgraduates, the
quantitiy
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quantity
 of learners who got
further
 study and part-time
work
were
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was
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 almost
similiar
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similar
with
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to
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 2725 and 2535 and
he
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the
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difrence
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difference
 between both
choise
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choices
 was 195 people. the number of candidates who were
unemployment
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unemployed
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 was about 5 times more than doing voluntary
work
 with 1625 and 345 respectively after post-graduation in 2008.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • statistic
  • unemployed
  • voluntary
  • postgraduate
  • part-time work
  • graduate students
  • full-time work
  • enroll
  • higher education
  • alternative career paths
  • trend
  • not engaged in full-time employment
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