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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You took your family to a nearby restaurant.you were disapointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant.

#restaurant #manager
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Dear Mr Weasly, My name is Nurul Hikmah and I am
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a regullar
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regullar
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regular
Costumer
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customer
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 at your
restaurant
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. I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you about what I am facing at your
restaurant
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.
this
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 is
very
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 bad experience for me and my family. I will tell you In
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 letter.
Fisrt
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First
,
last
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 week I went to your
restaurant
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 In
The
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25flower Avenue. I went with my family. we ordered a pizza,
chiken
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chicken
 and four soda waters. we
was
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 waiting about 30 minutes and
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finally
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finally,
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 the meal
come
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 and I was disappointed with the meal, the
chiken
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chicken
not
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was not
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 fresh and the pizza was not delicious. I
said
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spoke
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 with the employer but, they
do
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 not respond
me
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to me
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. I suggest you can solve
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 problem soon. because it can make your
restaurant
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 lose your
costumer
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customer
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.
in
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addition
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addition,
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 I hope you can tackle
problem
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the problem
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about
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with
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 the meal and service. thank you for your attention and
i
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I
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 am looking forward to hearing from you soon Best regards NURUL
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to improve coherence.
task achievement
Be sure to address the main points more thoroughly. Include more details about your experience and how you would like the problem to be resolved.
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Polite and respectful tone, which is suitable for this type of letter.
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