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you are going abroad on holiday and your friend will stay in your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter - explain where you hide the key - describe what your friend need to do in your absen - say when you are coming back

#holiday #friend #house #absen
Dear Ann, How's life there? I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I would like to thank you for
agreed
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 to take care of my
house
 as long as I am on my holiday. I am writing
this
 letter to tell you some
informations
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 that you need to know associated
to
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with
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 that. As you know
that
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I am going to leave
at
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on
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 2nd June, which is tomorrow morning. So, here are several things that you have to know before you come there.
Firstly
, I will leave the key in Erin's
house
 when I leave, Erin is my
neighbor
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 and her
house
 is
accros
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across
of
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from
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 mine. You can ask it to her and tell her that you are my friend
,
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 when you are taking it.
Secondly
, I have bought you some snacks and I will put it on the table, in front of the TV.
In addition
, as I said before I need you to take care of my cat, Alina. I have put her food beside her cage, and usually she
eat
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 three times a day which is at 8 A.
M
 in the morning, at 12.30 A.
M
 in the afternoon, and
last
 at 7.00 P.
M
 in the evening.
Beside
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, if you have
a
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free time, please take her out of the
house
 every morning.
That is
 all about Alina's
necessary
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. I will come back here
at
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 12th June, and if my schedule goes as I planned I will arrive home at 5.00 P.
M
. Thank you so much for
agreed
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 to help me to take care of my
house
while
 I am not here, I really
apreciate
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appreciate
 that. See you when I come back home, Ann. Sincerely, Wiwik
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coherence cohesion
The letter could be structured more logically. For instance, placing information about the house key and other necessary points into clearly defined paragraphs would improve clarity.
task achievement
There are some grammatical and language usage errors such as tense agreement and misplaced words. Proofreading for such errors would enhance clarity and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
You have a suitable greeting and closing which sets a friendly and polite tone.
task achievement
You included all the necessary information your friend needs to know, addressing all parts of the task.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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