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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category compared in 2016 with 2015

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category compared in 2016 with 2015
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The information on
export
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earnings
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 during 2015 and 2016 in various product categories, including Petroleum
products
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, Engineered goods, Gems and Jewellery, Agricultural
products
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, and Textiles, are provided in the chart.
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While
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apply
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The table shows the percentage change in values for each category in the same
period
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 of
time
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.
Overall
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, Petroleum
products
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 attributed the highest
export
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earnings
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 for both years of the
period
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. Most of the
products
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 showed an increasing change in values except Gems and Jewelry,
whereas
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 Textiles appeared as the highest percentage of change during the
period
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 of
time
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. It can be seen that the
export
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 of petroleum
products
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 earned approximately 63
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016, increased by 3% from
last
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year
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year's
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earnings
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 at roughly 60
billion
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dollars
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 and commanded the highest
export
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earnings
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 compared with other
products
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 for the
period
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 of
time
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. The increasing trend of
export
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earnings
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 emerged for some other
products
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 including Engineered goods which gained 61
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016, surpassed
last
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 year’s
earnings
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 with less than 60
billion
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dollars
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 by an 8,5% increment,
while
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 Agricultural
products
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earnings
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 rose 0.81% by more than 30
billion
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 of dollar for both years. Textiles emerged the most significant changes in value, earned 25
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015,
increased
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and increased
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 by 15.24% to 32
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016.
On the other hand
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, Gems and jewellery witnessed a lower trend in the
period
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 of
time
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,
dropped
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dropping
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 by 5.18% from 2015 to 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, products, period, time, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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