As a result of electronic inventions ,people do less physical activity and this is having a negative effect on their health . To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The results obtained from qualitative analysis of phytochemical compounds among all
extracts
are shown in Table 3. The total phenolic content (TPC) which experiences a steady increase in both leaves and stem
extracts
ranges from 0.000221 to 0.000902 mg/g. Meanwhile, the total flavonoid content ranged from 0.000202 to 0.000905 mg/g.
In contrast
to phenolic compounds, the total flavonoid content (TFC) in leaves and stems shows different responses as the extraction
time
increases. TFC in the leaf
extracts
fluctuates over
time
while
a slight drop is observed in the stem
extracts
. These results are in line with some previous works on the topic, which reported that
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happens throughout the plant organs. A study on
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compound of Momordica charantia (Malik, 2019) revealed that the occurrence of some bioactive compounds differs in each extraction
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task achievement
Try to directly address the essay prompt about the impact of electronic inventions on physical activity and health. The response should clearly present a position (agree or disagree) and support it through structured arguments.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction and conclusion to provide a proper structure to the essay. These sections help in framing your arguments and summarizing the main points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between different points and maintain a logical flow throughout the essay. This way, your essay will be easier to follow for the reader.
task achievement
The text provides a detailed analysis of phytochemical compounds, showcasing the ability to handle scientific data and terminology efficiently.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are logically structured, making it relatively easy to follow the progression of the discussion on phytochemical compounds.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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